Kia ora, I am a student at St Francis of Assisi School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
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Sunday, January 19, 2020
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Kia Ora Jacob,
ReplyDeleteWhat an intriguing short story. It’s full of a lot of great twists and turns and I especially like your use of ellipsis to build suspense.
Do you think ghosts exist? If so what do you think they’d look like? I think they’d be like a paler version of themselves when they were alive that floats and looks a wee bit sickly. I don’t think they’d shout boo though.
Quick tip: Perhaps you could use some of these tips for making eye catching blog posts to enhance your post and appeal a bit more to your readers.
Happy blogging!
Ngā mihi maioha,
Shannon (SLJ)